Butter In My Hair

Yeah, sorry to be the one to bear bad news, but this really wasn't that funny. It was badly written, stylistically immature, and, dare I say it, lame. And it's ...

I like this. It's beautiful and a little bit haunting. What inspired it? Thew beginning of S2 didn't sound or flow that well. Maybe you should think about tweaking it. ...

Whoa... Fand. Harsh much? I don't think that was really necessary to jump down her throat like that. You know, if you really hate this poem that much, then perhaps ...

I didn't really like this. It's flat, unemotional, and as EnchantressMuffin said, very tell-not-show. Pretty pointless, in my opinion. Your subject matter was good-- war is something we all need ...

The writing in this was a little chunky and I think some commas would be in order. Also, when you have a dialogue that ends with "he said", the proper ...

I'd say that this is pretty feelingless as far as it goes. I am sure that Luke feels his loss very strongly, but as the reader, what do we feel? ...